The bird is definitely a focal point now Jacob., and I like the detail of its feet, looks like it's coming down to land. in your first piece you had the sun coming OFF the page. that is actually a good compositional device. It draws your eye across the page . You could crop half your sun off, just an idea , then your bird will star even more. I love your watercolour work by the way, nice how you have achieved lighter and darker areas ( tone).
Great improvement of you art Jacob!I like how you made the sun and your bird much bigger.Plus you made your hills smaller!That was a really good idea!Keep up your really good blog posts!Tu Meke job!